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For that level it seems fine. The grammer needs a lot of work, but that's okay in a rough draft.
It only shows a limited research ability (from what I can tell) as it looks like your only sources were the internet or anecdotal. If you could fine some journal or book sources it could be very strong.
Being self-referential in an academic paper is usually a no-no and reserved for more casual writing.
Look forward to reading your conclusions.
Ld
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When the elephants fight, it is bad for the grass. When the elephants make love, it is also bad for the grass.
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Kenyan Proverb
Last edited by Lawdog; March 17th, 2008 at 09:07..
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